At least we can all agree on…

[HitRed]

1. ABBA’s new album

[Dukasaur]

I haven't heard it yet, but reading good things about it.

[JdeV 100]

Christmas storms hit California with much-needed snow and rain
Two dead in submerged car as major Christmas storm hits California

(there u go this b the werse

in this one) storm
storms in california have caused fatalities and state-wide chaos but might also have relieved months of drought
storms in california might have relieved months of drought but have also caused fatalities and state-wide chaos
ipso facto everyone know/s u r the resurrection)
in california there were storms
there r

[Dukasaur]

Quoting is not your forte, apparently.

[JdeV 100]

Quoting is not your forte, apparently.

Am I doing this correctly? Which quote were you talking about?

[Dukasaur]

Quoting is not your forte, apparently.

Am I doing this correctly? Which quote were you talking about?

there u go this b the werse

in this one) storm
storms in california have caused fatalities and state-wide chaos but might also have relieved months of drought
storms in california might have relieved months of drought but have also caused fatalities and state-wide chaos
ipso facto everyone know/s u r the resurrection)
in california there were storms
there r

[JdeV 100]

I don't see an attribution for your quote. What's the quotation part of my poem?

[Dukasaur]

I don't see an attribution for your quote. What's the quotation part of my poem?

Sorry, I didn't know it was a poem.

I thought it was a cut-and-paste from some article and parts of the lines were missing.

I guess poetry excuses the odd line breaks.

[JdeV 100]

Yeah. Anyone who plagiarises, their whole life is f*ck all. They are f*ck all. Don't accuse me of that. Or butcher my first lines, pls.

[Dukasaur]

Right Guard Will Not Help You Here.

[JdeV 100]

Right Guard Will Not Help You Here.

Quoting is not your forte, apparently.

[Dukasaur]

Bravo.

[jimboston]

There’s no indication that what was written was a poem.

It looks more like some monkey got to the keyboard and luckily there some real words mixed in with a bunch of random letters and spaces.

Duk I forgive you for making the assumption you made, as the assumption I made was worse.

Now… knowing it’s poetry… I can offer my opinion as such.

IMHO it sucks and makes no sense.

(Of course I’m not your target audience as I think most poetry sucks.)

[JdeV 100]

There’s no indication that what was written was a poem.

That what what what was what you say?

[jusplay4fun]

I can at least agree with JimB on this:

At least we can all agree on…
Postby jimboston on Tue Dec 28, 2021 9:11 am

There’s no indication that what was written was a poem.

[JdeV 100]

But you might have all been more familiar than that with Philip Larkin's This Be The Verse and recognised something of the style of ee cummings in my layout, and since you couldn't make sense of it as prose, I am taking the lame feedback as a culture fail for the forum. There is also some evidence from my earlier posts that I can quote and I'm not that illiterate. It's a very good poem in my book, I just thought it might have been nice to try it on you here, since I'm locked down. Ah, well.

[jusplay4fun]

But you might have all been more familiar than that with Philip Larkin's This Be The Verse and recognised something of the style of ee cummings in my layout, and since you couldn't make sense of it as prose, I am taking the lame feedback as a culture fail for the forum. There is also some evidence from my earlier posts that I can quote and I'm not that illiterate. It's a very good poem in my book, I just thought it might have been nice to try it on you here, since I'm locked down. Ah, well.

I know a bit about ee cummings and enjoy his poems. I do not recognize nor enjoy what you claim is your poetry. And you did not immediately identify it as such when questioned about it by Duk soon after you posted it. Lame feedback? I disagree; rather, what has been posted is accurate description of your bad poetry. Culture fail? Yes, failure to appreciate your version of a bad poem.

[JdeV 100]

Alright, thank you for the confirmation about your enjoyment of cummings, and the time you took to provide a critique. Sweet of you.

Happy New Year!

[jusplay4fun]

Alright, thank you for the confirmation about your enjoyment of cummings, and the time you took to provide a critique. Sweet of you.

Happy New Year!

I know. You are welcome. Happy New Year..!

[jusplay4fun]

But you might have all been more familiar than that with Philip Larkin's This Be The Verse and recognised something of the style of ee cummings in my layout, and since you couldn't make sense of it as prose, I am taking the lame feedback as a culture fail for the forum. There is also some evidence from my earlier posts that I can quote and I'm not that illiterate. It's a very good poem in my book, I just thought it might have been nice to try it on you here, since I'm locked down. Ah, well.

I read about Philip Larkin; he was a very good poet.

His relationship with women was far more interesting:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Relationships_that_influenced_Philip_Larkin#Monica_Jones

I still think that if you had initially identified your post as poetry, it may have gotten a better reception here in this Forum thread. There is irony that you posted your poetry in the thread called: "At least we can all agree on…"

[JdeV 100]

I read about Philip Larkin; he was a very good poet.

His relationship with women was far more interesting

I know a bit about ee cummings and enjoy his poems. I do not recognize nor enjoy what you claim is your poetry.

I still think that if you had initially identified your post as poetry, it may have gotten a better reception here in this Forum thread. There is irony that you posted your poetry in the thread called: "At least we can all agree on…"

Now that you know it is poetry, feel free to comment on it. The days when we were unclear if it was poetry are gone. If I am not an idiot, the irony is not one for you to declare; it is your becoming the subject.

[jusplay4fun]

I read about Philip Larkin; he was a very good poet.

His relationship with women was far more interesting

I know a bit about ee cummings and enjoy his poems. I do not recognize nor enjoy what you claim is your poetry.

I still think that if you had initially identified your post as poetry, it may have gotten a better reception here in this Forum thread. There is irony that you posted your poetry in the thread called: "At least we can all agree on…"

Now that you know it is poetry, feel free to comment on it. The days when we were unclear if it was poetry are gone. If I am not an idiot, the irony is not one for you to declare; it is your becoming the subject.

I will give your suggestion some thought before I post here.

[HitRed]

December 30, 21 Home

I speak, for I am God who created all that exists.

I understand many things, many think I am old and old fashion to think why the way things are. There is a lack of me the one true God in people's lives. I am given no credit for life today. Many think life is something you throw away. Life is precious and fragile and should not be taken for granted. One's life is very valuable in the eyes of God. One’s life should be just as valuable to the person. Every person was created in the image and likeness of God Himself. How special is that! Knowing I thought so much of a person to create that person. Lo, I am God the Creator and maker of life that exist. You are fearfully and wonderfully made in the eyes of God Himself.


Go now.
For I am God.

[2dimes]

Did any of you buy the new ABBA recording?

[jusplay4fun]

Christmas storms hit California with much-needed snow and rain
Two dead in submerged car as major Christmas storm hits California

(there u go this b the werse

in this one) storm
storms in california have caused fatalities and state-wide chaos but might also have relieved months of drought
storms in california might have relieved months of drought but have also caused fatalities and state-wide chaos
ipso facto everyone know/s u r the resurrection)
in california there were storms
there r

So the poet, JdeV, has identified this as a poem. That is fine, although the clarification came a bit late.

I read poems by ee cummings and a few others, but not by Philip Larkin.

Having done that and giving this some thought, I have a few questions for the poet, and some observations and comments:

1) If poetry has no rules for syntax, punctuation, form, or rhyme, how does the common person like me recognize it as poetry?
2) Why misspell "werse"? (I assume it stands for worst).
3) Why end the poem with "there r"? It seems a misspelled word, a shortened version (of "there are"), an incomplete thought, or a typo. Perhaps it is meant to stimulate thought; I am not sure it does.
4) You apparently refer to ONE storm, then discuss "storms in california"
5) The summary, for me, and the central idea in your poem is that storms are helpful for some and harmful for others. The same can be said for many other events in nature and in the world.
6) I am of the opinion that poetry is aimed at a small audience and most people do not bother to read it, much less trying to understand most of it. My recollection is that most poets die very poor financially as they do not produce best sellers while they are alive.
7) The one guy on CC who could likely give you some decent feedback no longer posts on CC these days.