Who can make the best villanelle????

[btownmeggy]

"A villanelle has only two rhyme sounds, and it is nineteen lines long, consisting of five tercets and one concluding quatrain. The first and third line of the first stanza alternate as the third line in each successive stanza and form a couplet at the close."

Like so:

Refrain 1 (a)
Line 2 (b)
Refrain 2 (a)

Line 4 (a)
Line 5 (b)
Refrain 1 (a)

Line 7 (a)
Line 8 (b)
Refrain 2 (a)

Line 10 (a)
Line 11 (b)
Refrain 1 (a)

Line 13 (a)
Line 14 (b)
Refrain 2 (a)

Line 16 (a)
Line 17 (b)
Refrain 1 (a)
Refrain 2 (a)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle

GO!

[btownmeggy]

Wimps.

[Stopper]

f*ck that for a lark.
Seems far too much like hard work.
I'll stick to haikus.

[hecter]

I don't like writing poetry. I didn't even make a haiku.

[Serbia]

"A villanelle has only two rhyme sounds, and it is nineteen lines long, consisting of five tercets and one concluding quatrain. The first and third line of the first stanza alternate as the third line in each successive stanza and form a couplet at the close."

hmm... can someone interpret this for me, a commoner?

[heavycola]

"A villanelle has only two rhyme sounds, and it is nineteen lines long, consisting of five tercets and one concluding quatrain. The first and third line of the first stanza alternate as the third line in each successive stanza and form a couplet at the close."

hmm... can someone interpret this for me, a commoner?

Well that didn't scan at all

[Stopper]

Ach! I can’t stop playing: try as I might.
I know: I need to find someone to blame;
Lackattack: he started this blasted site

Often do I lose; it’s those dice all right,
It can’t be because I’m bad at this game!
Ach! I can’t stop playing: try as I might.

And even when I don’t have a green light,
I post in t’forum; it’s a second hame,
Lackattack: he started this blasted site

Upon my social life there is a blight
I forget appointments, much to my shame;
Ach! I can’t stop playing: try as I might.

Non-Hasbro Risk; play all day and all night,
One day, I will get a gun and take aim:
Lackattack: he started this blasted site

One of these days, from here I will take flight,
When finally, in time, I see I’m lame,
Ach! I can’t stop playing: try as I might.
Lackattack: he started this blasted site

[heavycola]

BRAVO!

[btownmeggy]

Wow, this was just a spam thread, and you truly brought it to a new level, Stopper.

You are an inspiration to us all!

[Anarkistsdream]

I wanna write one!

[Anarkistsdream]

Here is a villanelle in correct form... Took me about 3-4 minute to write...

One year ago today
Shots rang all around
And there is nothing more to say

Sweet fragrance fell away
As did all the sound
One year ago today

The children, they did play
In the air and on the ground
And there is nothing more to say

Everyone thought all okay
They never felt the pound
One year ago today

The carnage they did lay
Their bodies all were browned
And there is nothing more to say

I alone would stay
I would never fall down
One year ago today
And there is nothing more to say

[Backglass]

Go hang your head in shame.
Haiku's just weren't enough?
This post is really lame.

Your first thread received acclaim.
Folks wrote a lot of stuff!
Go hang your head in shame.

But you ask for more of same.
19 lines I have to bluff?
This post is really lame.

For you now I have disdain.
With your chest you try to puff.
Go hang your head in shame.

Within this rhyme I flame.
I'll agree it's pretty rough.
This post is really lame.

This poem I've managed to mame.
I'm bummed I couldn't work in "muff".
Go hang your head in shame.
This post is really lame.

[Jesse, Bad Boy]

Go hang your head in shame.
Haiku's just weren't enough?
This post is really lame.

Your first thread received acclaim.
Folks wrote a lot of stuff!
Go hang your head in shame.

But you ask for more of same.
19 lines I have to bluff?
This post is really lame.

For you now I have disdain.
With your chest you try to puff.
Go hang your head in shame.

Within this rhyme I flame.
I'll agree it's pretty rough.
This post is really lame.

This poem I've managed to mame.
I'm bummed I couldn't work in "muff".
Go hang your head in shame.
This post is really lame.

This is made of win.

[Stopper]

This is made of win...

...whereas mine is made of winnits.

BUMP to encourage someone else to have a go...

[autoload]

I thought a villanelle was going to be a female villain or something.

[Thorthoth]

An Abstract Villanelle For a Future Generation.

Quento shah
Sietem rane
Torun vah

Vahleen bah
Pretor dain
Quento shah

Senten lah
Gaileen bain
Torun vah

Morane mah
Layvour gane
Quento shah

Lintaine Drah
Badruth klain
Torun vah

Nagath prah
Garthor shain
Quento shah
Torun vah

[betiko]

I thought threads like this were only created by doomyoshi

[Thorthoth]

I thought threads like this were only created by doomyoshi

Are you implying that btownmeggy has a multi?

[mrswdk]

It was literally just today I was beginning to wonder if Thot had turned over a new leaf and left its necrobumping days behind it. Clearly not.

[Thorthoth]

It was literally just today I was beginning to wonder if Thot had turned over a new leaf and left its necrobumping days behind it. Clearly not.

swdk used the n-word again.