grade my writing

[Titanic]

Pretty good but a bit more content and showing that you have researched would help

Yer, I agee... I would give it a low B, high C.

[static_ice]

it looks like you have a backbone of an outline, now here's the hard part you already have the info written down and organized but now you have to make it flow and seem interesting.


also fix up your conclusion, its kind of... redundant? (the first sentence at least)

[diddle]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

[Syzygy]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

Kind of raunchy towards the end...

[diddle]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

Kind of raunchy towards the end...

i'm a twisted young lad

[The1exile]

Could probably mess with some of the sentences to make them flow better, e.g. "Free enterprise also allows consumers to make choices. It is a lot like democracy" becomes "Free enterprise is a lot like democracy, in that it puts choice in the hands of the average consumer instead of a single potentially selfish and corrupt individual and organisation", but don't get me wrong - it's good, especially compared to most of your posts here.

[Iliad]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

Let me just say: WTF?

[0ojakeo0]

thanks for the input guys. its a new teacher so i hopes he likes it.....


actually i couldnt give less of a damn everyone says im really smart but dont try and i guess its tru but i like sports better lol. Actually last year last reoport card i dont think i got less than a b but in behavior i didnt get higher than a B

[Iliad]

thanks for the input guys. its a new teacher so i hopes he likes it.....


actually i couldnt give less of a damn everyone says im really smart but dont try and i guess its tru but i like sports better lol. Actually last year last reoport card i dont think i got less than a b but in behavior i didnt get higher than a B

I reckon it was okay. I don't know why everyone suddenly thinks that because you are 13 you must be dumb.

A bit more content and ta-da!

[magneticgoop]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

[quote="Matt aged 13"]I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

[/quote]
same name

[MeDeFe]

Took a look at what I wrote like when I was in 8th grade, and I'll give you a 2.2 on a scale from 4.0 (just passed) to 1.0 (Can't get any better)

[Skittles!]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

Were you high? Pissed, perhaps?

[dcowboys055]

Well Jake you can pull from this thread that everybody agrees you will pass...lol

[unriggable]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

Were you high? Pissed, perhaps?

Who gets high in middle school?

Besides the teachers of course.

[0ojakeo0]

not bad, here's a snippet of my writing when i was 13

I like honey, it made by beees and is eaten by bare like winnnie the pooh, he i smy favourite bear, i like imagining him in the bath, with all the othe bearrs.......

Were you high? Pissed, perhaps?

Who gets high in middle school?

Besides the teachers of course.